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you gave in the thesis statement: 
1) Students can learn responsibility
a. They have to come to work on time every day
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b. They must serve customers in a friendly manner
c. They have to maintain the store shelves with inventory
2) Students can learn the value of money
a. Students will learn that it takes a lot of time and effort to make money
b. Students will make wiser choices when buying things with their own 
money
3) Students will learn how to work as a member of a team
a. Students will learn how to compromise with other employees (helping out 
when someone is sick, etc.)
b. Students will learn about the friendship that comes from teamwork (feeling 
like you can trust others)
C. Conclusion
It is a valuable experience for teenagers to have jobs while they are students 
because they will learn to be responsible adults. They will have an 
appreciation for money and they will learn about working with others. All of 
these traits will benefit them throughout their lives.
A Sample Essay (based on the outline above)
It is a good idea for teenagers to have jobs while they are students because 
they can learn about responsibility; they can learn the value of money and 
they can learn how to work as a member of a team.
When teenagers have jobs while they are students, they can learn how to be 
responsible. As an employee, you must follow a weekly schedule. This 
means, you have to come to work on time. If you are scheduled to begin work 
at 8 a.m. on a Saturday morning, you have to be there at 8 a.m. It doesn't 
matter if you went to a party the night before and do not want to get up. You 
have to get up. Your boss is relying on you to do your job. As an employee, 
you also learn that you must serve the customer in a friendly manner. If you 
are not friendly, the store may lose business and you may lose your job. 
Finally, an employee is responsible for maintaining the store shelves with 
inventory. If you work in a department store, you have to keep the shelves 
filled with merchandise. The products have to be priced and placed on the 
shelves. If the shelves look empty, customers may get a bad impression of the 
store and may not continue to shop there. It is good for students to learn 
responsibility when they are young because it will benefit them as they get 
older.
Another benefit to teenagers working is that they will learn the value of 
money. Often students get money from their parents, but they do not realize 
how hard their parents work for that money. When students work, they begin 
to appreciate how difficult it can be to make money. They also realize that 
"money doesn't grow on trees" as some students seem to believe when asking 
their parents for money. Another reason it is good for students to work is that 
they will make wiser choices when they use their own money to buy things. 
For example, if students work 20 hours per week at $7.00 per hour, they will 
make $140 per week. In one month, that is about $540. Perhaps a student will 
think twice about spending $120 for a pair of tennis shoes or $350 for a stereo 
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system when s/he has had to work very hard for that money. On the other 
hand, when students do spend money for personal objects, they will 
appreciate them more than if they had gotten the money from their parents. 
Finally, working teenagers learn from being members of a team. As 
employees, students learn to work with others and help one another. For 
example, if someone is sick, you may be asked to help out. In addition, other 
employees will depend on you to do your share of the work. If one person 
does not do his/her job, other employees may have to do extra work to 
compensate. Students will learn very quickly that it is not good teamwork to 
expect others to do your work. Finally, students will develop friendships with 
other employees because they have learned to count on each other. Working 
as a member of a team will build strong character in students.
To conclude, it is a valuable experience for teenagers to have jobs while they 
are students because they will learn to be responsible adults. They will have 
an appreciation for money and they will learn about working with others. 
These experiences will help them grow into adulthood and benefit them 
throughout their lives.
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m Question TYPE Drill 
Read the question, decide what type it is, and then 
choose the type answer from the 4 options below. 
1. Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others 
prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer 
to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support 
your answer. 
 (A) Point of View 
 (B) Describe with Details
 (C) Compare
 (D) Agree or Disagree
2. A person you know is planning to move to your town 
or city. What do you think this person would like and 
dislike about living in your town or city? Why? Use 
specific reasons and details to develop your essay.
 (A) Point of View 
 (B) Describe with Details
 (C) Compare
 (D) Agree or Disagree
3. Is it better to enjoy your money when you earn it or is 
it better to save your money for some time in the future? 
Use specific reasons and examples to explain your 
opinion. 
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 (A) Point of View 
 (B) Describe with Details
 (C) Explain with Reasons & Examples
 (D) Support or Oppose
4. "When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck 
has nothing to do with success." Do you agree or disagree 
with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and 
examples to explain your position. 
 (A) Compare
 (B) Agree or Disagree
 (C) Explain with Reasons & Examples
 (D) Support or Oppose
5. Students at universities often have a choice of places to 
live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, 
or they may choose to live in apartments in the 
community. Compare the advantages of living in 
university housing with the advantages of living in an 
apartment in the community. Where would you prefer to 
live? Give reasons for your preference. 
 (A) Point of View 
 (B) Describe with Details
 (C) Compare
 (D) Agree or Disagree
6.It is better for children to grow up in the countryside 
than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific 
reasons and details to develop your essay. 
 (A) Explain with Reasons & Examples
 (B) Support or Oppose
 (C) Compare
 (D) Agree or Disagree
7. Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this 
change improved the way people live? Use specific 
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reasons and examples to support your answer. 
 (A) Compare
 (B) Agree or Disagree
 (C) Explain with Reasons & Examples
 (D) Support or Oppose
8.Resolving problems between individuals or groups is 
important. What should be considered or kept in mind in 
resolving problems between individuals or groups? Use 
specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
 (A) Point of View 
 (B) Describe with Details
 (C) Compare
 (D) Explain with Reasons & Examples
9. A company has announced that it wishes to build a 
large factory near your community. Discuss the 
advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on 
your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? 
Explain your position. 
 (A) Point of View 
 (B) Support or Oppose
 (C) Compare
 (D) Agree or Disagree
10.Countries, businesses, and schools are three areas that 
need good leaders. Choose one of these three areas and 
describe the most important qualities of a leader in that 
area. Explain why these qualities are important, using 
specific examples and details. 
 (A) Point of View 
 (B) Describe with Details
 (C) Compare
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 (D) Agree or Disagree
11. What change would make your hometown more 
appealing to people your age? Use specific reasons and 
examples to support your opinion. 
 (A) Point of View 
 (B) Describe with Details
 (C) Explain with Reasons & Examples
 (D) Support or Oppose
12. It has recently been announced that a new restaurant 
may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or 
oppose the plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details 
to support your answer. 
 (A) Compare
 (B) Agree or Disagree
 (C) Explain with Reasons & Examples
 (D) Support or Oppose
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2. C 
3. A 
4. B 
5. C 
6. D 
7. C 
8. D 
9. B 
10. B 
11. B 
12. D 
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