Tell me about your family

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Bài viết của Mr ZigZag 
My family have five members. That are my father, my morther, my younger sister , my younger 
brother and me. My familly lives at Phu Hoa town(Long Xuyên city) I am Phuong, I am 14 
years old and I am a pupil. . First, My father is a teacher. Character's him is very happy. 
However I am very fear father, but I love father. Next, My mother is noise , she has long hair 
and black. Before I go to bed, she usually said :"Sleep well". I love my mother very much. Next, 
my youger sister , she is 10 years old and she is excellent pupil of my primary school. From 7- 8 
p.m, I usually teach her about exercise. Finally, My younger brother is 4 years old. He is very 
much alive. I am very love my familly. With me ,family always is the assured support. If I have 
one wish . I will wish " My familly aways is happy." 
Bài sửa của wellfrog 
My family have five members. That They are my father, my morther, my younger sister , my younger 
brother and me. My familly lives at We live in Phu Hoa town(Long Xuyên city) I am My name is 
Phuong, I am 14 years old and I am a pupil. . First, My father is a teacher. Character's him is very happy 
He is a jovial man . However, I am very fear father fear him very much ,but. I love my father.Next, My 
mother is noise talkative , she has long hair and black long black hair . Before I go to bed, she usually 
said says :"Sleep well". I love my mother very much. Next, my youger sister , she is 10 years old and she 
is an excellent pupil of in my primary school. From 7- to 8 p.m, I usually teach her about some 
exercises. Finally, My younger brother is 4 years old. He is very much alive. active I am very love my 
familly very much . With For me ,family always is is always the assured a reliable support. If I have 
one wish . I will wish " My familly is aways is happy 
Giới từ chỉ nơi chốn em nhớ như sau : 
-Các nơi chốn nhỏ như : sân bay ,trường học ,khu mua bán .... thì dùng AT 
- Các nơi chốn lớn từ làng ,xả , quận ,thành phố ,tỉnh ,thị xả ,nước ... thì dùng IN 
I am + tên : chỉ đựoc sử dụng trong văn nói khi giới thiệu trực tiếp ,còn trong văn viết ,không phảo 
giới thiệu trực tiếp thì dùng my name is ... 
Không phải diễn tả sự việc theo thời gian nên không dùng : first ,second .. .Có thể dùng : the oldest 
person in my family ....,hoặc : the first person I want to tell you about is .... 
Chữ family chỉ có một chữ "L" thôi em nhé ! 
Character's him is very happy : chà ! câu này sai nghiêm trọng đây nhé ! 
thứ nhất đại từ sở hửu không dùng dấu"'s" : 
the book's him (sai) 
his book ( đúng ) 
the book of him ( đúng ) 
thứ hai là " happy " là tính từ chỉ trạng thái nhất thời của con ngừoi chứ không phải để chỉ tính 
tình ,muốn nói đến tính tình thì dùng jovial ( tánh tình vui vẽ ) 
Sau However phải có dẩu phẩy 
Fear là động từ ,không dùng với to be 
alive : còn sống ! 
active : hiếu động 
like very much : rất thích 
không đựoc dùng very like ,vì like là động từ mà very chỉ đứng trước tính từ và trạng từ thôi 
Các trạng từ năng diễn như : always ,often ... đặt trứoc động từ thừong ,sau to be 
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Bài viết của peden 
"There are 7 people in my familỵ My father is a good photoghrapher. He is very gentle and 
boon. My mother is a home-maker.She cooks very well and she is always caring to everybody in 
my family.I have an elder sister ,an elder brother and a younger sister. My younger sister is a 
pupil in class 9A1.My brother is a student ,he is studying in HB university.My sister graduated a 
pedagogic college last year and now she is applying for a post.Another people is my 
grandmother,she is very old but she is still strong-minded. The last one is me. I am in the 
eleventh grade and i am not good at English. I feel happy because i have a good home. I love my 
family so much". 
Bài sửa của thatsmygoal 
"There are 7 seven people in my familỵ My father is a good photoghrapher. He is very gentle 
and boon. My mother is a home-maker.She cooks very well and she is always caring to about 
(We use CARE TO to talk about caring to do sth) everybody in my family.I have an elder 
sister ,an elder brother and a younger sister. My younger sister is a pupilstudent in class 
9A1.My brother is a student ,he is studying in at HB => Don't use short form in Writing 
university.My sister graduated a pedagogic college last year and now . Now she is applying for a 
post.Another people person/ member is my grandmother,she is very old but she is still strong-
minded. The last one is me. I am in the eleventh grade and i am not good at English. I feel happy 
because i have a good home =>Câu này ko ổn cho lắm. Bạn nên sủa là Happy family. I love 
my family so much". 
Comment: 
Bài viết của bạn khá ok. Nhưng có 1 số điểm cần luư ý: 
1. Không được viết tắt trong đoạn văn 
2. Không được viết số, mà phải viết chữ 
3. ANOTHER + Singular Countable Noun(EG: another person) 
4. Không nên dùng ngôn ngữ chat (VD: u =>you) 
Bài sửa bổ sung của wellfrog 
My sister graduated a pedagogic college => My sister graduated from pedagogic college 
I am in the eleventh grade and i am not good at English. 
=>Although I am in the eleventh grade ,I am not good at English. 
hoặc :I am in the eleventh grade ;however,I am not good at English. 
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Bài viết của Lê Như Nguyện 
There are four people in my family:my father,my mother,my younger brother and me.My family 
lives in Nhatrang city.My family has a establishment which makes dry squid and beef.Both my 
father and my mother work there.My father is very strict.He likes to talk with his friends in his 
free time.My mother is gentle and kind.She cooks very well.She likes listen to classcial 
musis.She usually gives us some useful advices when we have problems.My father and my 
mother always help the poor people and the oldster.My younger brother is studying at high 
school.He is a smart pupil in class.At home,he is a taciturnity people.He likes listen to rock 
music and plays games on computer.And the last one is me.I have just graduated from university 
for 5 months.I am finding the job now.I feel very happy when I lives in my family.I loves my 
family so much. 
There are four people in my family:my father,my mother,my younger brother and me.My family 
lives in Nhatrang city.My family has an establishment which makes dry squid and beef.Both of 
my father and my mother work there.My father is very strict.He likes to talk with his friends in 
his free time.My mother is gentle and kind.She cooks very well.She likes listening to classcial 
musis classical music .She usually gives us some useful advices when we have problems.My 
father and my mother always help the poor people and the oldster.My younger brother is 
studying at high school.He is a smart pupil student in class.At home,he is a taciturnity people. 
taciturn man .He likes listening to rock music and plays games on computer.And the last one is 
me.I have just graduated from university for 5 months.I am finding looking for thea job now.I 
feel very happy when I lives in my family.I loves my family so much 
find : tìm thấy 
look for : tìm kiếm ( chưa thấy ) 
Chủ từ là I thì động từ không thêm s nhé 
he is a taciturnity people : câu này có hai lỗi sai: 
1. a là số ít trong khi people là số nhiều 
taciturnity là danh từ phải đổi thành tính từ ( tacitur) để đặt trước danh từ 
Học sinh cấp 2 trở lên dùng student 
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Bài sửa của thatsmygoal 
Bài sửa bổ sung của Wellfrog 
Bài viết của heo con lun 
there are six persons in my family,those are parents,three old brothers and me.although they live 
in a house but everybody have a different personalitỵ 
both father and mother are quiet,the oldest bother is very hot tempered,i always fear him when 
he is angry,the orther and me are joillỵ,i love my family,they are friendly with people,we live in 
a poor village but we always love together,now i live sofar my family but i have never fogotten 
day which i lived beside familỵ 
There are six persons people in my family,those .Those =>nên chấm are parents :three old brothers and 
me. Although they live in a house but everybody have has a different personalitỵ (=>Ý bạn nói về tính 
cách đúng ko? Mình nghĩ bạn nên dùng chữ CHARACTER.). Both father and mother are quiet 
reserved .The . The (=> nên chấm)oldest bother is very hot tempered,i .I always fear him when he is 
angry .The orther other and me I I are [s][b] joillỵ jolly .I love my family,they are friendly with people 
. We live in at a poor village but we always love together each other .Now i I ive sofar far my family 
but I have never fogotten never forget the days which i I lived beside familỵ 
Comment: 
1. Sau khi hết 1 ý, bạn nên chấm. Câu văn bạn hơi dài. 
2. Chữ "I"(tôi) luôn luôn viết hoa 
3. Chữ đầu câu luôn viết hoa 
=> Đây là ý kiến của mình về các lỗi của bạn. 
Although theywe live in a house but, everybody has a different personalitỵ 
Đã dùng although thì không dùng but nữa 
Gia đình đương bao gồm mình trong đó nên không thể dùng THEY mà phải dùng WE 
the orther and me are joillỵ: câu này sai kinh khủng quá :lỗi spelling : 
orther-> other 
joillỵ -> jollỵ 
lỗi cấu trúc : 
Đã dùng the others là ý nói tất cã những người còn lại(trong đó có tôi ) ,nên không thể 
thêm : and me nữa ,cho nên câu sửa thành : 
the others are jolly 
those are parents,three old brothers : câu này đổi thành : 
They are my parents ,my three elder brothers 
Anh chị ,cha mẹ .... khi dùng phải dùng sở hửu phía trước ,còn chữ elder sao bạn không 
tham khảo gợi ý của mình ở đề bài topic ? 
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